The Imaginary Ocean
The
wind was howling and water was splashing
against my face. I ran to the bottom of
the boat but, there was a leak. My boat was sinking! I grabbed a blanket and stuffed it into the
hole. I looked around and grabbed the
duck tape. I quickly tapped the blanket
to the hole. I ran back up the staircase.
I grabbed the steering wheel and tried to sail north, where the storm
was not so bad. But it was nearly impossible
to even travel a mile, before the boat was swallowed by waves.
“Timothy! It’s time to go!” shouted mom
“Coming mom!” I answered.
I like your story but maybe you can combine these sentences together, The wind was howling. Water was splashing against my face. With, The wind was howling and water was splashing against my face. Also combine these sentences, I ran to the bottom of the boat. There was a leak. Combine it with the word 'but'. I ran to the bottom of the boat, but there was a leak.
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