“I remember the sirens
wailing.” I answered.
“What else do you remember?” the lawyer asked.
“I remember hearing my sister cry as she told them what
happened.”
“Anything else?”
“No,” I replied. The lawyer left. I was alone in
my hospital room. I heard the ambulance
driver answering his questions.
“…Yes I know. I looked in front and behind. Which way?
Was what I was thinking as I stopped at the light. That car came out of know where when it hit
us.” answered the driver.
“That car, and your mistake, costed that little girl her
legs.” said the lawyer.
“I know, I know.” replied the driver.
Great story overall but, you forgot to indent the first sentence. I don't think you need the comma in this sentence, “I remember hearing my sister cry, as she told them what happened.” And one last thing, you forgot to put a period at the end of driver, the last line. That's really all the mistakes I could find.
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